I decided to open one topic for all my poems so I wouldn't spam too much...


I wrote this first poem just during the raw construction of my "Orion" Fanfiction, so I think the topic is pretty clear. I hope you like it...
It's not clearly a poem, 'cause there are no rhymes, but oh well...

It's called "Never Forget" (sounds cheesy, but oh well)



A waterfall
It’s my tears
Streaming down my cheeks

You
You’re lying there
Shattered into pieces

I am kneeling down
Screaming
Wanting to join you

You
You’ll never be back
Forever gone

The rain
Merging with the waterfall
Streaming down my cheeks

I can’t continue on living
But I am afraid of dying
I’ll always wander in between

Life is dull without you
The grief won’t disappear
Life has no sense without you
The agony will remain

I will never forget you

©Mina (02.01.2008)

That was a beautiful poem. RIP, Cliff :(

Thank you very much :)


The next one will be posted either this evening or tomorrow...

Just if you all want to, of course..

Beautiful... so sad :( Please post more!

Of course I will post more, I'll always post something until I'm running out of poems or nobody wants to read my stuff anymore...
@maisy blue (sorry, I don't know your name): I'd be happy if you read my fiction "Orion" (in the finished fictions section), I'm interested in your opinion ('cause I don't think I'm good at writing) And I'm glad that you like my stuff :)


And here's the next one, it's really really short, but I like it, anyway.

It's called "All that I Want" (yes, I've always got cheesy or crappy titles)


You’re all that I want
Everything I need
Everything I crave for

You’re everything I can’t get
Everything that harms me
Everything I’m not

©Mina (16.02.08)

Mhm, as nobody seems to read it, I'll post another one, one of my newest, to attract the attention...
I hope you like it (that means, if anybody reads it..)

It's called "Moonlight Sonata"



You’re alone
Standing in the middle of
A small glade
Surrounded by the forest
With the full moon shining
You’re nearly glowing in its light
And you’re scared

You’re alone
In the middle of nowhere
Surrounded by the forest
With the icy wind blowing
It’s messing up your hair
Dancing with the leaves
And you’re calm

You’re enjoying the sight
The atmosphere
The silence
‘til it’s too late
‘til it’s over

Until the sun rises again

©Mina (19.02.2008)


I don't like the end..

That last one was beautiful :) Very atmospheric, it reminds me of Beren and Luthien :)

Thank you very much :) I shall post the next one either this evening or tomorrow. And just if someone wants to read it

I'm reading! Sorry I can't always comment during the day. When I'm online during the day, I can't type because then my two year old daughter hears me tapping on the keyboard and comes running over to the computer and wants me to put on a game for her. So I can just sort of quietly read. But I will try to comment more!!

Oh, don't put yourself in a rush, dear :)
Family's always first :)
But I'm happy that you read and like it :)
But as I've written it before: Don't put yourself in a rush :)

And here's already the next one, this time a bit older again, actually the first one with rhymes (I actually managed rhyming without having help from the internet)
I wrote it in school, during a English lesson after a test (I finished the test about 20 minutes too early, so I had plenty time to write some stuff) and yeah, inspiration's hitting me most when I'm at school


It's called "Made-Up Thoughts"



The darkest night I’ve ever seen
In a place I’ve never been
Is it me you’re looking at
Wanting to start a nice little chat
Or is it the blonde few metres away
Whom you’re admiring day by day
To be honest, I don’t care
Because in reality
I’ve never been there
It’s just another stupidity
Made up from my memory
Made up from my deepest thoughts
In order to flee
To a place where I always wanted to be
I wish I had bought
A ticket to London for me

© Mina (25.09.07)

This has a lovely rhythm. I think it's great- it flows. BTW, whenever I write poetry, it NEVER rhymes. None of the poets who I read rhyme that much! So don't worry about rhyme, just write! It's beautiful!

Thank you very very much :)
Not all of my poems rhyme, especially the oldest ones (and also the newest), but well, rhyming gives 'em some sort of fluidity. And I don't think that my rhymes seem to be forced, so...oh well *shrugs*


I shall post the next poem either later this day or tomorrow

You rhyme very well! Whn I try to rhyme, my poems sound like this:

There once was a boy
he had a red toy
he also had a big dog
and liked to see a big frog


etc, you get the idea ;) So I stopped bothering :)

Cute xD

Oh well, as promised, here's the next one. This 'poem' is rather unsual and also really really dark and depressing, but I kinda like it...
If anyone of you doesn't understand the poem (which I hope isn't the case), then feel free to ask me, I don't bite :)


It's called "Family Life"


You
Me
Two

You
Me
Three

Him
Me
Car

Car
Me
Crash

You
Me
Two

You
Me
Grief

You
Alone

Me
Gone

© Mina (16.10.07)

I like it- VERY creative. It reminds me of a certain poet, but I can't remember who it is for the life of me. If I remember, I will post the name...

Thank you very much :)

And yes, please post the name of the poet when you've remembered it :) And if you don't mind, could you also post a sample of his/her work, too? :) Am curious^^


The next poem will be posted tomorrow and thanks for reading and commenting :)

and, maybe if you got some spare time, you could read my Orion ficlet? Don't have to, but I'd be happy if you did :)

Ohh- I'd be happy to red your fiction! :) It will give me something to do today while the baby is running around (if she lets me stay on the computer!) :)

Thank you :) I'm looking forward :)

And as promised, here's the next poem. It's again a bit older, but I guess you all don't mind, do you? :)
My newest (and I like that one best) will be posted as the last, I guess.
Anyway, I hope you enjoy reading this little thingy.

As you already might've noticed, I'm somehow always writing depressing romantic stuff, sometimes just depressing stuff. *shrugs* It just suits me, I can't write happy stuff *shrugs* Anyway, it doesn't matter.
Have fun with reading the poem.


It's called "Hopeless addiction"


I’m addicted to you
And there’s nothing I can do
To distract myself from your sight
Am lost in my thoughts
Every single night
Haven’t I bought
Myself free?
I can’t see
Though my eyes are open
I fear I’m frozen
Though I have no reason
Everything I’ve begun
Has crumbled to dust
I’m feeling some kind of disgust
It’s hopeless
I’m useless

© Mina (September 2007)


I hope it's not too depressing

*pushes this thingy up again with this unnecessary little post*

I'm sorry, I'm a secret comment whore, I love getting comments, the more, the better, so please excuse my lack of patience..

That was very intense, it sounds like an obsessive relationship :wacko:

Ohh that was good. More poems, please.

Like you, I can't write happy poems. My poems are really abstract and sad.

I thought about two poets you might like.

William Carlos Williams
WCW @ Poets.org

and ee Cummings
eec @ Poets.org

Here's one by William Carlos Willams:

Vast and grey, the sky
is a simulacrum
to all but him whose days
are vast and grey and—
In the tall, dried grasses
a goat stirs
with nozzle searching the ground.
My head is in the air
but who am I . . . ?
—and my heart stops amazed
at the thought of love
vast and grey
yearning silently over me.

Thank you very much, both of you :)

And woah, maisy, that poem is just so beautiful, thank you so much for posting it :)

The next poem will follow sooner or later, it'll be the one I wrote today :)

And here it is already :)

I kinda like it and then I don't...
The second verse is kinda weird, but the rest is okay, I think.
The rhymes themselves might also be a bit weird, but I hope you'll like this poem nonetheless :)


It's called "Failure"



You are standing in front of me
Arms folded in front of your chest
Though it’s you I can see
I can’t stand the way you’re looking at me

Do you think that it’s the best
If we just continue to pretend
It’ll be a challenging test
Why didn’t we get some rest?

The pieces of our love are unable to mend
I don’t know what we did wrong
We weren’t able to pretend
That we could rule our land

We failed to be strong
We couldn’t stand up for ourselves
Now I know what we did wrong
We didn’t know where to belong

© Mina (12.03.2008)

LOVE that... love it!

especially:

I'm so happy that you like it :)

I hope you'll like my other poems as well (and my Orion ficlet)

The next poem will be posted tomorrow :)

And I'm also so happy that you (and Vanessa, too) don't stop reading those poems, it means a lot to me :) :heart:

And here's the next one which's one of my favourites :)

I hope you like it :)



It's called "Dark Alleyway"



Look around
What do you see?
A dark alleyway
You’re alone

Would you walk through?
In spite of all the danger?

Yes, you would

Why do I know?

Because you don’t care
You don’t care about what might happen
You don’t care about yourself
Not a single bit

So go, walk on
And greet your best friend

He, who’ll always be there
He, who’ll always follow you
He, who’s the only guarantee in life

Go and greet Death

©Mina (19.02.08)

Oh wow, that was powerful, didn't see that coming :blink:

Thank you very much :) Am glad you like it :)

And here's the next one, written a few days ago

I hope you like it


It's called "Mistake"


The rain is pouring down on me
I’m not the one I used to be
I am kneeling on the ground
Hoping I’ll never be found

The weight is dragging me down
The burden of my failure
I couldn’t help but frown
When thinking of this torture

I never thought this could happen
That I could be this open
That I would get hurt so much
By just one single touch

Why did I reject you
Why didn’t I give you a chance
Why didn’t I have any clue
Why have I been in such a trance

But now it is too late
I can’t cope with your hate
You were the only one
And now I will be gone

© Mina (13.03.2008)

Wow, that was intense :o

Thank you very much :)

VERY powerful.

Thank you very much.
Did you read the other one on the previous page as well?

One of the newest, wrote it last week's friday..
It's a bit unusual, but I hope you'll like it nevertheless.


It's called "Silence"


Sky’s crumbling
Voices mumbling

Looking out of the window
Pure darkness
Drowning in my sorrow
Lost brightness

Sky’s crumbling
Voices mumbling
Snow’s falling

Humans lying on the ground
Eternal abyss
Snowflakes whirling around
Pure bliss

Sky’s crumbling
Voices mumbling
Snow’s falling
He’s calling

Deathly silence

© Mina (21.03.2008)

Wow, that was heavy :blink:

I shall take this as a compliment.
Thank you very much.
I've got another version of this poem and it's even heavier than this one.


The next one will be posted tomorrow, I guess.

..if I can force myself to post it..

That last poem you posted was incredible. I love the whole use of "snow". It's such a powerful thing- blindingly bright, but intensely cold and even deadly.

Thank you very much :)
I'm glad that you like it and still read my stuff :)

Maybe I should publish my poems as a book :P